Thursday, December 19, 2019

Summer learning Journey week 1 / 19th

Moon

Mind blow up
Objects  
Over

Nearly there

1 comment:

  1. Hi again Hayley,

    Wonderful poem! I like how simple you kept your poem, yet all the ideas you carried across. I especially like the "nearly there" to show the anticipation! Would you like to go to the moon one day? How would you like to go into space?

    One way to improve our writing for our audiences is to include colour. Colour makes our work stick out so that people are engaged into our work!

    Keep up the great writing!

    Gabe

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Thank-you for your positive, thoughtful, helpful comment.