Hi Hayley! My name is Mia from Yaldhurst Model School, I am a participant of the Summer Learning Journey. Awesome work! I really like your Haiku poem. I like the way you have added in your feelings as well.
The beach really does tie in with summer doesn't it? It's a place where lots of people go during the summer. Although, I didn't write my Haiku poem about the beach, I wrote it about a summer morning. What is your favourite activity to do during summer?
It's hard to think of things to improve on. Maybe, you could have a go at making your own picture, using google drawings!
My name is Zana and I am a blog commenter from the Summer Learning Journey.
I really enjoyed this activity as I love poetry and writing Haikus for my friends, I usually write a Haiku in their birthday cards!
Your haiku is great and you followed the haiku rules well with the 5, 7,5 syllables so great job with that. I love the summer theme with the haiku and the summer background.
To step up your work you could include a few more haikus to your post or even better record yourself reading them aloud and post the recording!
Keep up the great work and I hope to see more of your posts over the summer.
Thank you both, I love to go swimming and play with my dogs in the summer. We haven't had that much sun this summer but i am hoping to have more so its warmer to swim in. I like swimming with my friends.
Hi Hayley! My name is Mia from Yaldhurst Model School, I am a participant of the Summer Learning Journey. Awesome work! I really like your Haiku poem. I like the way you have added in your feelings as well.
ReplyDeleteThe beach really does tie in with summer doesn't it? It's a place where lots of people go during the summer. Although, I didn't write my Haiku poem about the beach, I wrote it about a summer morning. What is your favourite activity to do during summer?
It's hard to think of things to improve on. Maybe, you could have a go at making your own picture, using google drawings!
Keep up the blogging!
Mia
Kia Ora Hayley,
ReplyDeleteMy name is Zana and I am a blog commenter from the Summer Learning Journey.
I really enjoyed this activity as I love poetry and writing Haikus for my friends, I usually write a Haiku in their birthday cards!
Your haiku is great and you followed the haiku rules well with the 5, 7,5 syllables so great job with that. I love the summer theme with the haiku and the summer background.
To step up your work you could include a few more haikus to your post or even better record yourself reading them aloud and post the recording!
Keep up the great work and I hope to see more of your posts over the summer.
Ngā mihi nui,
Zana Yates
Thank you both,
ReplyDeleteI love to go swimming and play with my dogs in the summer. We haven't had that much sun this summer but i am hoping to have more so its warmer to swim in. I like swimming with my friends.
Hayley:)